A woeful sentence

It amazes me when this in day and age any well-known publisher allows instructionally-deficient sentences to grace one of its book’s pages. Even one such sentence is too many.

While reading today the book Value Investing for Dummies, this sentence stopped me in my tracks: “Working capital is the asset base that recirculates through the business as cash, receivables, and inventory and is used to acquire raw materials and to produce and sell products” (p. 34).

So what is working capital?

It’s something that recirculates as cash, among other things. But that doesn’t reveal what it is. This is a form of mystery writing that’s not in a mystery.

A prime cause of the confusion is the verb recirculates.

Unfortunately, neither the online versions of the Merriam-Webster Dictionary nor the American Heritage Dictionary contained the word “recirculate.” However, I did find the word “circulate” in The Free Dictionary. Here are its four definitions:

1. To move in or flow through a circle or circuit: blood circulating through the body.
2. To move around, as from person to person or place to place: a guest circulating at a party.
3. To move about or flow freely, as air.
4. To spread widely among persons or places; disseminate: Gossip tends to circulate quickly.

Ignoring the fact that recirculate means to “circulate again,” none of The Free Dictionary’s four definitions match how the term was being used in Value Investing for Dummies.

If I were the person who edited that sentence, I would have asked the writer, “What are you trying to say in the sentence?”

Too much is left unsaid.

Uncovering what was unsaid and discovering what a writer really meant to say are prime responsibilities of an editor. Apparently, with regard to the sentence quoted earlier in this post, whoever edited it didn’t finish the job.

Baseball’s begun and so has the talk

Though the Phillies succeeded in winning a pennant, they could have a harder time this season. Though they’ve added new blood to their roster, none of their additions can compare with the Mets addition of Johan Santana. Despite that, some Phils haven’t shied away from predicting another first-place finish. Though the pen is mightier than the sword, those outspoken Phillies will need to prove that their bats are as mighty as their words.

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An update on the Thomason interview

After re-reading my interview with Mac Thomason, I realized I hadn’t asked him about his comment that “It’s very disturbing when the General Manager of your favorite ball club makes fun of you in his book, even if you made fun of him first.”

Here’s Thomason’s reply:

It goes back to the Kevin Millwood for Johnny Estrada trade, which caused me to write the following, rather overheated, entry:

http://www.bravesjournal.com/?p=349

 

Fire John Schuerholz

That incredible idiot just traded Kevin Millwood. To the Phillies! A division rival! For Johnny Estrada, a 26-year old AAA catcher! That’s grounds for commitment, not just dismissal.
I still think that they could have gotten more for Millwood, though Estrada did have a good year in 2005. Anyway, in his book Built To Win , Schuerholz, or rather his ghostwriter, quoted this statement (and some comments from the entry) on page 70-71. It surprised the heck out of me when I saw it.

If you haven’t read the interview yet, you can read it here.