To revise well, you need to be able to evaluate your sentences’ clarity and effectiveness. Just because you understand a sentence does not mean that others will.
- Make sure each of your sentences contains at least one subject and verb and expresses a complete thought. If you have difficulty identifying your sentences’ subjects and verbs, it will make it more difficult to evaluate your sentences.
- Review your sentences for prepositional phrases. If they’re “loaded” with them, that could weaken your sentences effect.
Example: In college, Jane studied math during the day after lunch with Judy.
The above example contains four prepositional phrases, each of which begins with a preposition:
- in college
- during the day
- after lunch
- with Judy
The example above could be improved by this rewrite: In college, Jane and Judy studied math after lunch.
For those grammatically inclined, “Jane” and “Judy” form a compound subject, “studied” is the verb, “math” is a direct object indicating what Jane and Judy studied, and “after lunch” and “In college” are prepositional phrases serving as adverbs that reveal when Jane and Judy studied math together.